Tell and Show, J/D drabble, rated R

[sid]

Ooh.  D/s.  100 words.

TELL AND SHOW

 

Jack exhaled.  A distressed sound escaped him.

 

“Uncomfortable?” Daniel asked immediately.

 

“Mmm.”

 

“Uncomfortable in a good way?”

 

Jack moaned.

 

“Good,” Daniel said softly, stroking Jack’s hair.

 

Jack licked his lips.  “Can I come?”

 

Daniel’s eyes widened.  “Just from this?” he exclaimed.  “I wish you would!”

 

Jack rocked his hips.  “Tell me,” he groaned.

 

Daniel bent close.  “Come for me,” he whispered.  “Show me; I want to watch.  Do it, Jack, do it!”

 

Waves of painful pleasure swamped Jack.  Crying out, he came.

 

When he grew quiet, Daniel reached for the toy between his lover’s legs.  “Guess this one’s a keeper.”

Comments

[riverfox.livejournal.com]

Yummy, but... D/s? ::shakes head:: ;)

[sid]

Not a traditional example of D/s, but it takes place in the D/s universe that I write. So, Jack is a sub who is asking permission to orgasm.

With 100 words to work with, there wasn't enough space to figure out if Jack was in bondage during all this...

but I like to think so
;-)

[riverfox.livejournal.com]

Oh, okay. Sorry if I sounded criticizing. :)

[sid]

No, no. You had a good point. I put "D/s" more to identify the universe than to express the goings on in the drabble itself. :-)