Tell and Show, J/D drabble, rated R

[sid]

Ooh.  D/s.  100 words.

TELL AND SHOW

 

Jack exhaled.  A distressed sound escaped him.

 

“Uncomfortable?” Daniel asked immediately.

 

“Mmm.”

 

“Uncomfortable in a good way?”

 

Jack moaned.

 

“Good,” Daniel said softly, stroking Jack’s hair.

 

Jack licked his lips.  “Can I come?”

 

Daniel’s eyes widened.  “Just from this?” he exclaimed.  “I wish you would!”

 

Jack rocked his hips.  “Tell me,” he groaned.

 

Daniel bent close.  “Come for me,” he whispered.  “Show me; I want to watch.  Do it, Jack, do it!”

 

Waves of painful pleasure swamped Jack.  Crying out, he came.

 

When he grew quiet, Daniel reached for the toy between his lover’s legs.  “Guess this one’s a keeper.”

Comments

[autumnxchild.livejournal.com]

Very nice - Hot XD

[sid]

And yet only rated R! :-D Thanks much!

[janedavitt.livejournal.com]

Mmm. Guess it is! :-)

[sid]

Oh, definitely! In fact, I want one!

[green-grrl.livejournal.com]

Daniel’s eyes widened. “Just from this?” he exclaimed. “I wish you would!”

Oh! I, um... yeah. *fans self*

[sid]

Daniel knows a great offer when he hears one. *nods* *winks*

[amnellwyvern.livejournal.com]

*drool*

[sid]

Likewise. :-)

[starting-gate.livejournal.com]

Ooh, yeah. That felt soo good... :)

[sid]

That's what Jack said. I had to edit the drabble for length. ;-)

[http://users.livejournal.com/_minxy_/]

Ha. Love Daniel's deadpan understatement.

[sid]

Hee! He's a master of those. :-)

[whimsicalwhims.livejournal.com]

Mmm... Very nice.

[sid]

Thank you! That seems to sum up Jack's sentiments in a nutshell!

[adafrog.livejournal.com]

hee! Sorry, funny, as well as sexy. :D

[sid]

Yes, a little touch of humor there at the end! Along with the boneless heap of melted!Jack. *drools*

[msbeata.livejournal.com]

Cool icon.

Hot fic.

[sid]

dustandroses made the icon, and it's MINE, ALL MINE!!! Bwahahaha!!

Glad you enjoyed!

(this icon is also hers/mine, all mine)

[or-mabinogi.livejournal.com]

..... and where do I get me one of those toys?

[sid]

I think maybe they picked it up during an off-world mission. ;-)

[delphia2000.livejournal.com]

Amazing the reaction you can get from a Tickle-Me-Elmo in the right places. :OD Nicely heated, Sid.

[sid]

LOL! Thanks, delph! *laughs some more*

[tigerlilly2063.livejournal.com]

Can I have one of this too please?

Guh, that's hot for a R-rating!
I'm always amazed how intense so few words can be.

[sid]

Totally non-graphic, but our minds fill in all the glorious details. ;-)

Thank you very much!

[from-the-corner.livejournal.com]

Mmmm, very nice :-)

[sid]

Thanks! Glad you liked it! :-)

[spacemonkeyphd2.livejournal.com]

OMG......*guh*.......hhhhhhooott........*THUD*

[sid]

Glad to be of service! ;-)

[melayneseahawk.livejournal.com]

Guh. So hot.

[sid]

*giggles at your icon* These boys can't help but be hot; I claim no credit!

[dustandroses.livejournal.com]

Oh, yum...

Somebody's been shopping on Blowfish (http://www.blowfish.com/) again, haven't they? *g* I love that place.

Very nice. I'll say it's a keeper!

[sid]

*bookmarks hastily* :-D

Glad you enjoyed! Sure, either Blowfish or possibly some offworld kinky bazaar. You never know.

[riverfox.livejournal.com]

Yummy, but... D/s? ::shakes head:: ;)

[sid]

Not a traditional example of D/s, but it takes place in the D/s universe that I write. So, Jack is a sub who is asking permission to orgasm.

With 100 words to work with, there wasn't enough space to figure out if Jack was in bondage during all this...

but I like to think so
;-)

[riverfox.livejournal.com]

Oh, okay. Sorry if I sounded criticizing. :)

[sid]

No, no. You had a good point. I put "D/s" more to identify the universe than to express the goings on in the drabble itself. :-)

[michare1a.livejournal.com]

Incredibly hot ;-)

[sid]

That's always nice to hear! Thanks!

[tresa-cho.livejournal.com]

Haha! Nice.

[sid]

New toys are so much fun! *g*

Glad you enjoyed it!