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sid ([personal profile] sid) wrote2007-11-25 11:09 pm

'Whirlwind', G rated Sentinel drabble

Written for the [profile] sentinel_thurschallenge: Quiet Time 

Can be read as gen or *gasp* pre-slash.

WHIRLWIND
 
Work done, feet up, game on, beer in hand, brain on pause. Jim loved his quiet time.
 
The toilet flushed, water ran, the bathroom door flew open. Sandburg scurried out in underwear and socks and dashed into his bedroom. Drawers creaked, shoes bounced across the floor, Sandburg muttered.
 
Jim sipped his beer and tried to focus on the game.
 
Sandburg appeared in shiny shirt and tight jeans. Crossed to the door, picked up his keys and grinned. “Don’t wait up for me.”
 
Jim saluted with his bottle as Sandburg disappeared out the door.
 
Jim used to love his quiet time.

[identity profile] janedavitt.livejournal.com 2007-11-26 02:17 pm (UTC)(link)
I love the way this is almost like blank verse in its internal rhythm; nicely done! And poignant at the end there; I'm left thinking Jim would swap quiet for having Blair stay in.

And I like the way you got so much over, with just four words, about what Blair's intentions are :-)

shiny shirt and tight jeans