Gen SG-1 ficlet, rated G
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sidI started this way back in July, with nothing more than the titles. I finished it up about a week ago and waited to see if I had anything to add. Nope!
584 G rated gen words, especially for those of you who enjoy outsider POV. I can't decide if this is from a children's schoolbook or a brochure that gets handed out to tourists....
Tales of Travelers from Far Places
collected by Nersook Vas
Chapter Five
ERRTH
They came forth clad in raiment of green. They were four in number, each unlike the others save for apparel. Of men there were three, and the fourth was Female yet dressed alike to her companions. They pronounced themselves to be SG-one.
The Female
Those Poateen who were present later said that she was man-like and yet not, a strong warrior of her Errth tribe but possessed of a great and delicate beauty. Her hair was yellow as the fylexa when it blossoms during the Warming, and she wore it short, capped about her head as a boy-child might do. Her skin was white and pink, her eyes the blue of sky. She was blessed with the power of being thrice-named, and the names she bore were thus: Keptin, also Samm, also Cartr.
Primary Male
The tallest and strongest of the men was of the Jafa race, and bore upon his forehead, as is usual, the symbol of his Lord. His symbol was of gold, denoting the highest of ranks. He alone was not of Errth, but had joined forces with them upon leaving the service of his Lord. Of hair he had none, and his skin was as dark as the peoples of the Far Southern continent, likewise dark were his eyes. He bore but a single name, and was called: Teelk.
Secondary Male
The next tallest of the men was the eldest, it is said. He wore a small hat, and circles of smoky glass to shield his eyes of brown from the sun. His hair of brown had begun to shade to silver, but his body was straight and fine with the memory of youth. His skin was tanned by the sun. He was Leader, perhaps due to his years. He as well was thrice-named, and his names were: Kernl, also Jak, also Ohneell. The Female was heard to call him Sirr, but that was understood by the Poateen to be a mark of respect and not a name-blessing.
Lesser Male
The smallest and weakest of the men was not a warrior, but a student and a scribe and a voice when understanding was needed (as when we communicate with our brethren across the sea.) He wore a hat that was flat like a breakfast cake, and wore shining circles of glass to make his vision proper. His hair was brown and it blew in the breeze, being longer than the Female’s. His skin was smooth and young, pale by nature but faintly reddened by the sun, and his eyes were said to be bluer than sky. He also possessed the power of being thrice-named, and his names were: Doktr, also Doniell, also Jaksnn.
Purpose
Their purposes in coming to us from Errth were manyfold: to trade, to ally, to hold as friends. They sought weapons and medicines and knowledge of the sciences. They offered medicines and farming tools. Other offerings (had they been needed by the Poateen) included foodstuffs, blankets, shelters, clean water.
Dealings
The Poateen traded medicines for farming tools. An alliance was deemed out of the question, but it was agreed to hold as friends and speak again often.
Today
The Poateen and the people of Errth maintain and hold as friends. Our farms prosper, and many farmers now cultivate the rabeme that once only grew wild, in order to increase the supply of this medicinal herb to our Errth partners.
Rating
seven stars
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584 G rated gen words, especially for those of you who enjoy outsider POV. I can't decide if this is from a children's schoolbook or a brochure that gets handed out to tourists....
Tales of Travelers from Far Places
collected by Nersook Vas
Chapter Five
ERRTH
They came forth clad in raiment of green. They were four in number, each unlike the others save for apparel. Of men there were three, and the fourth was Female yet dressed alike to her companions. They pronounced themselves to be SG-one.
The Female
Those Poateen who were present later said that she was man-like and yet not, a strong warrior of her Errth tribe but possessed of a great and delicate beauty. Her hair was yellow as the fylexa when it blossoms during the Warming, and she wore it short, capped about her head as a boy-child might do. Her skin was white and pink, her eyes the blue of sky. She was blessed with the power of being thrice-named, and the names she bore were thus: Keptin, also Samm, also Cartr.
Primary Male
The tallest and strongest of the men was of the Jafa race, and bore upon his forehead, as is usual, the symbol of his Lord. His symbol was of gold, denoting the highest of ranks. He alone was not of Errth, but had joined forces with them upon leaving the service of his Lord. Of hair he had none, and his skin was as dark as the peoples of the Far Southern continent, likewise dark were his eyes. He bore but a single name, and was called: Teelk.
Secondary Male
The next tallest of the men was the eldest, it is said. He wore a small hat, and circles of smoky glass to shield his eyes of brown from the sun. His hair of brown had begun to shade to silver, but his body was straight and fine with the memory of youth. His skin was tanned by the sun. He was Leader, perhaps due to his years. He as well was thrice-named, and his names were: Kernl, also Jak, also Ohneell. The Female was heard to call him Sirr, but that was understood by the Poateen to be a mark of respect and not a name-blessing.
Lesser Male
The smallest and weakest of the men was not a warrior, but a student and a scribe and a voice when understanding was needed (as when we communicate with our brethren across the sea.) He wore a hat that was flat like a breakfast cake, and wore shining circles of glass to make his vision proper. His hair was brown and it blew in the breeze, being longer than the Female’s. His skin was smooth and young, pale by nature but faintly reddened by the sun, and his eyes were said to be bluer than sky. He also possessed the power of being thrice-named, and his names were: Doktr, also Doniell, also Jaksnn.
Purpose
Their purposes in coming to us from Errth were manyfold: to trade, to ally, to hold as friends. They sought weapons and medicines and knowledge of the sciences. They offered medicines and farming tools. Other offerings (had they been needed by the Poateen) included foodstuffs, blankets, shelters, clean water.
Dealings
The Poateen traded medicines for farming tools. An alliance was deemed out of the question, but it was agreed to hold as friends and speak again often.
Today
The Poateen and the people of Errth maintain and hold as friends. Our farms prosper, and many farmers now cultivate the rabeme that once only grew wild, in order to increase the supply of this medicinal herb to our Errth partners.
Rating
seven stars
*******
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 06:58 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:09 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 09:07 am (UTC)I love this. :-)) Also, I want breakfast cake.
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 09:14 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 01:27 pm (UTC)This is truly made of awesome!...
Deeds xx
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 07:13 pm (UTC)Unless in Chapters 1-4 it was all: they came through the ring and we didn't like their looks, so we stole their shoes and sent them packing.
:-D
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 03:29 pm (UTC)I love all bits (and assumptions!) about names. Outsider perspectives are so much fun. :D
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 07:18 pm (UTC)Glad you enjoyed this!
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 06:49 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 07:20 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:22 pm (UTC)*ahem* Absolutely adorable!
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:50 pm (UTC)*ahem* Thank you. :-)
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:52 pm (UTC)And I hope the "males" will never see this list with the rankings... *g*
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:57 pm (UTC)And inevitably, Jack and Daniel would each use it to piss the other one off. ;-D
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Date: Nov. 25th, 2011 11:42 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 26th, 2011 05:03 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 06:22 am (UTC)I adore outside perspective, and this is delightful. So many peeks into the culture here. LOVE that Teal'c is "primary male" and the way their own versions of spelling!
Best line: The Female was heard to call him Sirr, but that was understood by the Poateen to be a mark of respect and not a name-blessing. Not sure why, but much glee at that one. :D
...And I didn't even POKE you this time for gen, whee!
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 06:39 am (UTC)That 'Sirr' line. I don't know why either, but it's almost like they're dismissing Jack and his paltry mark of respect, where if he'd had FOUR names they might've bumped him up to Primary Male!
Of course Teelk might have had something to say about that. He's obviously so cool that he doesn't need more than one name. Dude's got gold on his forehead!
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 09:03 am (UTC)But I'm adding this comment mostly to tell you that since your fic is so squeefully adorable, I have bounced off and recced (http://stargateficrec.livejournal.com/1773434.html) it. :)
(do you have a fic page other than your tags?)
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 09:31 am (UTC)THANK YOU FOR THE REC!
Also, the awesomeness of Teal'c is without bounds. :-)
Tales of Travelers from Far Places, by Sid (G)
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 01:59 pm (UTC)It reads almost like a religious tract as well as an anthropological report.
You know you shouldn't really make me laugh so much I fall off my chair as often as I do - I'm going to hurt myself one of these days...;-)
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Date: Nov. 15th, 2011 02:36 am (UTC)Thank you for reading! :-)
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Date: Nov. 15th, 2011 02:39 am (UTC)Thank you!
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Date: Nov. 14th, 2011 08:49 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: Nov. 15th, 2011 02:33 am (UTC)I'm glad you like it!