'Breaking', drabble, sequel to 'Brittle', R

[sid]

Here is 'Brittle', Jack's POV, 100 words, where SG-1 is being held captive.  These drabbles are very dark.

And here is Daniel's POV, 100 words

BREAKING

Daniel thinks that he’d be better off dead, but so far it’s just an observation, not a plan of action. 

 

He knows he saves lives. Two guards have told him so.  Only one of them seemed disappointed; the other almost looked admiring, but Daniel is beyond expecting to find allies.

 

If Serrim’s busy with Daniel, he’s not off torturing and killing his prisoners. Daniel clings to that. “Not that I’m a fucking martyr,” he might say, if his mouth weren’t otherwise occupied.

 

The beatings have gotten worse, but he’s not paraded naked before the others anymore. Before Jack. 

 

Small mercies.

Sequel: 
http://http://sid.dreamwidth.org/79483.html 'Restoration'

Comments

[msbeata.livejournal.com]

Ow with a capital OUCH.

::whimper::

Please write more. Don't leave them like this. Forever. Til their hearts and minds break.

[sid]

But OF COURSE this will not last forever! Would I do a thing like that? Not that I have a plan, or anything...I just KNOW they're going home.

[starting-gate.livejournal.com]

Nooo!

So, the monster's not a woman. That's much worse!

*sob*

[sid]

*hands you tissues*

I always pictured a male, although not necessarily a human male. This guy is human - but just barely. *winces*

[yakkorat-fics.livejournal.com]

This guy is human - but just barely. *winces*

Is that in reference to his savagery? Or his size?

*cringes at what either would mean for poor Daniel*

God, I love you.

Love,
Julie-Rae

[sid]

Oh! Heh heh. His savagery! *cringes with you*

[whimsicalwhims.livejournal.com]

::shivers::

I feel the urge to send an urgent message to Jack that he needs to save Daniel, NOW.

(Very chilling and powerful drabble).

[sid]

Yes, but who's going to rescue Jack?

*meeps*

[sid]

:-O

SHHHHH!!!

*mumbles* freakin' mindreader

[whimsicalwhims.livejournal.com]

Oops. Sorry. Beware my powers of telepathy! Now if only I could conjure up the winning lottery numbers...

[whimsicalwhims.livejournal.com]

Oh, and yeah. I decided to delete my comment. Alas, the world shall never know the power of my brain.

(And wow, you can so tell that I didn't get enough sleep this weekend because now I'm getting punchy).

[sid]

Heh! I was thinking about deleting it myself! Now people will wonder, teehee!

Guess your telepathy works best when sleep deprived. :-)

[whimsicalwhims.livejournal.com]

Now people will wonder, teehee!

'Tis a conspiracy.

::looks suspicious::

[rockgoddes.livejournal.com]

Meep!

How did I miss the first one???

Well, I've read both now, so I'm looking forward to more...

...uhhh, there will be more, right?

[sid]

Oh, well, I can't very well leave them like this, I suppose. So more to come - someday. I'll put my muse to work on it!

Thank you.

[spacemonkeyphd2.livejournal.com]

Aaaww *sniffle* these are sooooo sad, you just want to go and hug them. I need to know what happens next, to make sure our boys are ok. :( *sniffle*

[sid]

I'm working on it! Cross your fingers!

[yakkorat-fics.livejournal.com]

Wow.

That's just... That's just absolutely amazing.
You're going to continue this, right? Please? Because... Please? *folds hands desperately*

Of course, my sadistic little mind wants to see what happens when poor Daniel does have to face Jack while accepting his tormentor's attentions passively. And if Jack can keep himself from trying to kill Serrim when he sees it.

I'd also LOVE to see you go back to when this "bargain" was struck. The moment of choice for Daniel.

And of course, Daniel and Jack's inevitable (please, God, I hope it's inevitable) reunion. *grin*

But mostly, I'm going to kneel at your feet and beg for whatever piece of inspiration hits you! Just PLEASE continue this 'verse!

Once again, you have managed to pack a hell of a whallop into 100 short words.

but he’s not paraded naked before the others anymore. Before Jack.

Is it really evil of me that I want to see that?

God, it's just so hard to be coherent here. My mind is blown. Again. I can't believe how much you are able to convey in such a short piece. The emotions are dead on. Your Daniel voice is perfect.

I'm so impressed. So, so impressed.

PLEASE continue this. I will beg and beg and beg. I will offer you cookies.

Love,
Julie-Rae

[sid]

Ah, well as you know by now, I did continue it! But I leaped right to the rescue, of course. I just couldn't bear to make them suffer any more, I guess. :-)

Well, not much more. ;-)